Super Hero Zeitgeist Introduction

The project that I am working on at the moment is called Zeitgeist. I am making an interactive pixelation animation, about a scientist who has discovered ‘the super power’ in the 1920s, which is before the first ever Superhero.

This is my first render of the introduction, with a placeholder voice. I don’t do accents very well, so please ignore my voice – it’s just there until a can get a real recording of my grandad. I would really like some constructive criticism on this.